day one
You stressed it in the seminar, first day.Deathtrap · 1982 — 第 29 / 30 章 · 2'59" · C1
Clifford isn't just pitching a play—he's explaining how he played Sidney all along. He left his draft in the drawer to lure the old master in, wrote deliberately wooden lines to keep him comfortable, then thanks him for Act Two while rejecting his ideas: "But we're not going to have a Long Island detective."
What happens: Clifford Anderson, once Sidney Bruhl's student, calmly reveals how he manipulated his old teacher. He left a first act in a drawer to bait Sidney, then handed him fake dialogue to keep him busy while he plotted his own moves. Now he describes the real Deathtrap, a play that mirrors what's happening between them.
注目の表現
a snapshare bed and boardtwigprick
このシーンの表現
very easy
Clifford admits to his rival that dialogue comes easily to him while plotting defeats him.
The test was a snap for her.
live together
suddenly understand
a crude insult for a man
clumsily heavy
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day one
You stressed it in the seminar, first day.what follows
I had this terrific first act, I just couldn't think of what came next.struggle a bit with
Dialogue's a snap for me, but I still have a little problem with plotting.The t in a little flaps between vowels.
Dialogue's a snap for me, but I still have a little problem with plotting.size 42, regular fit
Let's see. I think you're about a 42 Regular.not of his own will
See, Sidney's not going to help me, not voluntarily.this much I know
This I know 'cause Sidney uses three kinds of mouthwash...Because is clipped to 'cause, sounding like kuz.
This I know 'cause Sidney uses three kinds of mouthwash...that-clause: A that-clause after way spells out the method, with maybe softening it.
Is there a way that maybe I can harness that 17-jewel brain...keep doing
So I go on drafting Act One...whenever
And every time I leave the room, I put it inconspicuously in the drawer.time clause: Every time introduces a time clause; the main action repeats whenever it happens.
And every time I leave the room, I put it inconspicuously in the drawer.fails to see at all
That for a day-and-a-half, smart old Sidney doesn't even notice.suddenly gets it — British and casual; fine between friends.
And then dull old Porter comes in and twigs right away.face someone with proof
You rifling my desk, confronting me with the evidence, etc.a crude insult for a man — A crude insult saved for real fights.
-You're a prick, you know that? -Sticks and stones, Sidney.sleep a little
I hardly got a wink with all your elephantine tiptoeing around.stiff, lifeless wording
For every wooden line I wrote there, there's an aerial one up here.Link there's an so the s slides into an.
For every wooden line I wrote there, there's an aerial one up here.this junk, crudely — Casual venting; keep it out of formal talk.
I mean, I am going to burn this shit myself when I leave here.hand me the key
Now you give me the key, please.be grateful for
And I do thank you for Act Two, Sidney...the chair's armrest
Don't be stupid. Put the handcuffs through the arm of the chair.investigate someone
Meanwhile, he has his lawyer do some checking up on Victor...causative have: Have someone do something means getting another person to carry it out.
Meanwhile, he has his lawyer do some checking up on Victor...deeply unjust
Most of them very, very unfair.Under the pitch is a power reversal. Clifford, the student, now controls the room, and every polite line carries a blade. "Dialogue's a snap for me, but I still have a little problem with plotting" sounds humble, but it sets up the confession that he used Sidney's own vanity to make him useful. Clifford admits he wrote "dummy dialogue" on purpose, telling Sidney, "That was dummy dialogue, dummy! To keep you comfy while you're plotting." The flattery was bait. Even the thanks are a dismissal: "And I do thank you for Act Two, Sidney... But we're not going to have a Long Island detective." He takes what he wants from the old master and discards the rest. Sidney's insult, "You're a prick, you know that?" only confirms who is now in charge.
Dialogue's a snap for me, but I still have a little problem with plotting.Writing dialogue comes easily to him, but he can't build a plot—exactly the skill he needs from Sidney.
I hardly got a wink with all your elephantine tiptoeing around.He mocks Sidney's loud, clumsy attempts to sneak around, blaming him for a sleepless night.
For every wooden line I wrote there, there's an aerial one up here.The draft's stiff dialogue was on purpose; the real, better lines exist only in his head.
And four kinds of deodorant. Not for him the whiff of scandal.Sidney is obsessed with appearances and avoiding even a hint of scandal.
To bait Sidney. He knows the old master can't resist a plotting problem, so he makes the manuscript easy to find and lets Sidney's ego do the work.
Clifford. The former student has turned the tables: he takes the key, has Sidney put the handcuffs on, and rewrites the story on his own terms.
A new play that mirrors their own situation—Victor writing about Doris's murder, a lawyer digging up charges, and a fake collaboration used as a trap.
No. He thanks Sidney for Act Two but immediately rejects the Long Island detective, keeping only what serves his own play.
次のチャプター · 第 30 章a can of wormsClifford Spares Sidney
第 1 章truth in advertisingSidney's Play Flops on Opening Night
第 2 章add insult to injurySidney Rants About Being Written Out
第 3 章top billingSidney Plots to Steal a Play
第 4 章a god-sent opportunityMyra Urges Sidney to Call Anderson
第 5 章all the makingsSidney Calls Clifford About His Play
第 6 章got hooked onClifford Anderson Visits the Bruhls
第 7 章feet on the groundMyra Pushes Sidney to Collaborate
第 8 章go out of your wayClifford Asks for a Second Opinion
第 9 章hit a snagSidney Handcuffs Clifford
第 10 章untypical of meClifford Is Handcuffed
第 11 章the envy ofSidney Kills Clifford
第 12 章night and dayMyra Finally Tells Sidney to Leave
第 13 章guilt-riddenHelga Ten Dorp Arrives
第 14 章keep uncloudedHelga Foresees the Knife
第 15 章skeptical aboutHelga Predicts the Deathtrap
第 16 章once and for allMyra Hears Something Downstairs
第 17 章be my doingSidney Promises Nothing Will Go Wrong
第 18 章for future referenceThe Fake Murder Kills Myra
第 19 章lay an eggPorter Milgrim Meets the Secretary
第 20 章on the agendaPorter Reviews Sidney's Will
第 21 章a death wishSidney Pitches Deathtrap
第 22 章knock offClifford Wants a Shortcut
第 23 章be in on itClifford Talks Sidney Into Deathtrap
第 24 章kid a kidderBruhl and Anderson Team Up
第 25 章psychicHelga Meets the Man in Boots
第 26 章fed up withHelga Warns Sidney Again
第 27 章spill the beansThe Rehearsal Turns Deadly
第 28 章send someone packingClifford Turns the Gun on Sidney
再生中 · 第 29 章a snapClifford Turns the Tables on Sidney
第 30 章a can of wormsClifford Spares Sidney